Tuesday, April 1, 2008
Silences
There is a room and two people in it. The day outside is bright, sunny and humid. The air conditioner is humming so loud you had to scream a few decibels louder than usual to even whisper. There is a television on, playing inane entertainment that gets worse in degrees as her finger flicks the remote. Somehow, there seems to be no tension in the room. Its just him and her, and a room. The conversation moves from things mundane to things probably relevant in a reminiscence 50 years from now. Then, without even asking the question emerges, in butterfly touches, in measuring palms, in just lying there in each others arms and pretending to not know what it was leading to. Out of nowhere the passion explodes, one minute is quiet, and the next there is desire. A melding of bodies, with so many questions that form in the sweat beading their skin. Questions that get asked as they slowly stop and regain that staccato rhythm of vagueness again. The clothes come back on, the masks are back it doesn't seem like the moments of naked reality will ever return. The memory of pleasure recedes in a corner of their minds. They sit in their private silences in that room, thinking back. It is time to leave and the neutrality of banter creeps in again somehow. The drive back is simple enough, so is the parting. Tomorrow, as it always was, is and ever will be, is simply another day.
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apart from d obvious qns i wanna scream out... it mite as well be part of a longer, full, captivatin story...lets call it plot construction shall we? makes me wonder wat b4 n after...make m longer machaa...like d build up n peterin out of d tension..
obvious questions? what ones? this is not me if that is what you are going to ask... some of it yeah... not all of it though...
I will think of expanding on it.. but only if it fits with what already exists... wont if it doesn't...
dat's creativ writin no... ? make it fit... c if u can build around wat u got.. u'll still hav wat u want most...n then make a story out of it.. wish i used it on meself!
Let's see di... I somehow like this as is... not sure if I should expand... anyhow... I think bringing out story will need too much detail... being "ambiguous" to quote CT Indra is half of this plot we call writing..
i agree. a perfectly good piece can be spoiled by expanding. dis one is perfect as it is. almost as good as the apple pie theory which is very good. so keep up, and if creativity comes to u in little sparks, then let little be d size of the posts :)
did the bearded guy ever explain mona lisa's smile? There are as many interpretations and "contexts" as there are readers.
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